On one Sunday night, Sam and Dean Winchester were driving down I-35 in search of their next hunt. They had just finished putting a vengeful spirit to rest by burning the remains of the deceased so they would not be able to harm anyone again. Hunting supernatural things is what they do, and they are pretty darn good at it.
"Sam, what do we have next?" said Dean, concentrating on driving down the dimly lit road. Sam was about to answer when all of a sudden he got a phone call from their Uncle Bobby, who is also a hunter of supernatural beings.
"What's up, Bobby?" said Sam, wondering why he was calling after they just left his house not long ago.
"Sam, do you remember that awful man Mr. Fox who had the vengeful spirit after him?" said Bobby in a hurry.
"Yes, what about it?" said Sam confused.
"Well, it looks like you boys did not burn the right body because Mr. Fox was found dead just a few hours ago," said Bobby.
Sam then looked at Dean and told him "Dean turn the car around now!" Sam said suddenly, forgetting he was on the phone with Bobby. "Alright, we are heading back. Thanks, Bobby," Sam said.
"Alright, you boys be safe," said Bobby, ending the call. He also knew that Sam and Dean could handle this on their own.
"So what happened?" said Dean.
"Mr. Fox was killed, so Bobby thinks we should go back and check things out," Sam said, contemplating how they could have burned the wrong body. Sam recounted the story behind why they had to burn the vengeful spirit.
The vengeful spirit that was after Mr. Fox was a woman by the name of Lady Mary. She was very rich when she met Mr. Fox. She thought that she and Mr. Fox were in love when he asked her to marry him. However, one thing she had noticed was that she had never been to his home.
One day, when Mr. Fox was out of town, Lady Mary decided she would go to Mr. Fox's home just to look around. As Lady Mary walked to the door, she saw a sign that said "Beware of walking through this door." She did not know what to make of this, but still walked inside. Lady Mary walked around for a while and did not see anything out of the ordinary. Lady Mary saw Mr. Fox had nothing to hide until she came upon another door that told her to "KEEP OUT!" Lady Mary opened the door, and she was horrified by what she saw next. The room was filled with dead women that Mr. Fox had married and then killed. Lady Mary knew this because each woman had on a wedding dress.
Lady Mary shut the door and started to take a run for it out of the house. She was going to go tell her brothers what Mr. Fox had done, but she heard a strange sound. Lady Mary went to hide and saw Mr. Fox had come through the door dragging another woman toward the dreadful room. However, greedy Mr. Fox saw that the woman had on a beautiful diamond ring, but he struggled to get it off. Mr. Fox had such a difficult time that finally he decided to just cut her hand off. When he did, the hand flew in Lady Mary's lap. Mr. Fox then continued to drag the poor woman into the room. He planned to find the hand later.
Lady Mary used this as her chance to run out of the house. The next day, Lady Mary was surprised that Mr. Fox had decided to host a lunch at his home before they were to get married the next day. So she and her brothers went to his home where they had planned to confront and kill Mr. Fox. While they were at the table eating, Lady Mary told Mr. Fox about a dream she had where she recounted everything that happened at his house. Mr. Fox denied everything. Lady Mary then took a sip of her wine, and then held up the hand of the woman whom Mr. Fox killed. However, Lady Mary suddenly dropped the hand and became very dizzy. Lady Mary's brothers went to her side for help, but they were also dizzy until they all dropped dead. Mr. Fox had poisoned them all and took all of their money.
As Dean and Sam were arriving back in town, Sam realized something. All this time, they had thought that maybe Lady Mary had acted alone in trying to kill Mr. Fox. Lady Mary's brothers could have also tried to help her since Mr. Fox had killed them as well.
"Dean, I think I know who killed Mr. Fox!" said Sam suddenly.
"Who?" said Dean.
"We never stopped to think that her brothers would help her kill him," said Sam.
"Oh, I thought about it, but honestly that man was sick and he deserved everything he got. If we were not wanted in several states, I would have turned him in to the police for killing all those women," said Dean. Sam nodded in agreement.
The boys then found the grave of Lady Mary's brothers and burned their bodies next to where they had burned Lady Mary. Sam then called Bobby to let him know what happened. "I can't believe you idgits didn't think to burn the boys' bodies," Bobby said feigning that he was upset. "Yeah, yeah, Bobby. Mr. Fox had it coming. What case do you have next for us, Bobby?"
Sam and Dean then went cruising once again for their next case.
Bibliography:
English Fairy Tales by Joseph Jacobs with illustrations by John D. Batten (1890).
Author's note: I had a lot of fun with writing this storytelling. The original story that I retold is based off a story in the English Fairy tales, titled Mr. Fox. I was also inspired by the show Supernatural and its characters Sam, Dean, and Bobby. When I was reading the story about Mr. Fox, I felt like it could have a supernatural feel to it, so I ran with it. In the original story, Lady Mary is a rich woman who falls for Mr. Fox. Lady Mary and Mr. Fox are going to get married. Lady Mary realizes she has never been to Mr. Fox's castle, so she sneaks inside and finds out that he has been killing women and storing them in a room so he can take their riches. Lady Mary is mortified by her discovery and tries to run out of the house. She realizes, though, that Mr. Fox in in his castle. He is dragging a woman, and he cuts off the woman's hand so that he can get the diamond ring off of it. The hand lands in Lady Mary's lap, but Mr. Fox does not look hard enough to find the hand. So Lady Mary leaves the castle to confront Mr. Fox the next day. Mr. Fox denies everything, until Lady Mary pulls out the hand, and then her brothers kill him. For my story, the general theme is still the same except Mr. Fox does not die at first. He poisons Lady Mary and her brothers. They then become vengeful spirits who try to kill him. Sam and Dean had originally thought that only Lady Mary was after Mr. Fox, but her brothers were as well. I changed the ending for my own retelling of the story because I thought it was a bit boring that Mr. Fox just died and that was the end. I also wanted to make the story more fun and add a supernatural feel to the story.
I loved your story. I had no idea what story you were telling until later, which is always good because it means the story is rich with originality. I liked that you used the setting and characters of the show Supernatural, that was very creative. One thing you should do is read through your story again checking for the word "is" because in a few places you switch to "is" instead of "was" or "were" (in other words you're switching from past tense to present tense).
ReplyDeleteThis story is so unique! I loved how you included a second layer, a story within a story. Dr. Gibbs told us about this style a while back, and I think it's my favorite. The show Supernatural is always playing in the Union Wednesday afternoons when I get out of my lab. I never know what the plot is because I'm not concentrating on it. I should watch it. It sounds interesting. Good job!
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ReplyDeleteI really liked your story. I watch Supernatural every now and then; I don’t really have the time to completely follow the show. So I really enjoyed how you took the show and incorporated it into the story you were writing. You also were able to get in different parts of the show that made the story come together well.
You did so well on this story! I absolutely love the show Supernatural, so when I first read Sam and Dead I got really excited. You did a great job of relating the original story back into a supernatural theme. I read Mr. Fox as well, and I would have never thought to write something like this about it. Great job!
ReplyDeleteWow, super cool story and so unique! I have never seen the show Supernatural, but this now I may have to go check it out! You have a great writing style and the format was well done. I thought this story developed well and I can tell you put a lot of effort into it. Job well done!
ReplyDeleteI love the show Supernatural so from the beginning you had me hooked. I also have read this original story and I think you have done a great job of updating the story quite a bit. One of the things I like about this class is that it allows us to read all these stories and then translate them into our own words so that we are able to come up with a ton of unique stories which is what you ahve done here. Great Job.
ReplyDeleteI am SO glad I read this story. I have loved Supernatural for years and was so excited when I saw the picture of Sam and Dean! I also like that you used the story of Mr. Fox and combined it the way you did. I read that story, and it seriously gave me the creeps! You did a good job of keeping it true to the original, yet your spin was awesome!
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